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Roses are red,voliets are blue
I never been any happier then
how happy you made me when we
were together but when you
said that you needed sometime
it hurt I know why but I
couldn't help it
when I cried I only did it because
we might not be together no more
I would feel what you feel but I
would enjoy life and try to be a
normal teenager and move on
use your head think about it put
yourself in his shoes try to
imagine what he must be feeling
right now looking down at you
at his son who he loves and wants
to be happy
just try for me at least
I am saying this for your own
good cause I want you to be happy
as well just that he wants you happy
more and he probably wants you to
move on
I miss the smile you had on face and
I want to see it again and that is one
reason why I am saying what I am saying
I made this poem because i felt like it and plus one of my friends on here had given me the idea about this poem and plus my friend wanted me to do another poem so i did and this what i came up with and this is all true to. You see the only reason why we split was because he was close to dad who had died and being with me had brought back those feelings and he just needed time to think but i hope that he gets over it and comes back to me and i know i sound bad for saying that but it is true i still love him with all my heart and he makes me smile just being with him not that being with my friend and family makes me smile but he is different and i like that about him.
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Aerilia Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I hope things start to look up for you soon. Also, perhaps run poems through Microsoft Word before you post them, it looks better if it has correct spelling/grammar (I'm not picking on you, just trying to be helpful). For future reference: too/as well as/in addition, to as in "give it to me" and two as in "two fluffy kittens". You have a lot of potential and this is a very moving, heartfelt poem, but I think it could use a bit more work. You should listen to artists like The Cure and Joy Division to give you inspiration for your poems, the lyrics to their songs is kind of close to what I'm seeing in your poem.
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Darkrose765 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
ok thanks
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billndrsn Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Hope it turns out in your favor!!
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Darkrose765 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2012
thanks
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WeepingDragons Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it~!
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Darkrose765 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012
thanks glad u do and thanks for faving it
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WeepingDragons Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem~! <33
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Darkrose765 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012
:)
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